(Author’s Note: None. Fictioneers Ahoy!)
I Don’t Know Why You Don’t Want Me
by Miles H. Rost
It’s what Holly Blankenship always wanted.
She understood there was a price to be paid for having that serenity, and she was willing to pay it. For a while. The old ruins of the science building on campus gave it to her, and no one around to say anything.
But she didn’t want to be alone. She wanted serenity, without the loneliness.
“Excuse me. Is this ruin taken?” she heard from behind.
She whipped her head around at the male voice behind her. His eyes widened and he started to run away.
She sighed, turning around again.
Is Holly a ruin too?
The way I have her in mind, she’s just ruined by depression.
I had the feeling one of them might be a ghost. Sigh. Alone again.
Not how I imagined it, but that’s okay. That’s the fun of writing this stuff!
spooky goings on
Or just sad. 🙂
That old ruin! No wonder spectres abount this week! Sad and spooky
Well…she wasn’t really a ghost. Just a lonely girl.
I wonder why his eyes widened… This could so be developed into something longer! Loved it.
She glared at him, and that scares guys.
Haha.. too true!
A great teaser for something bigger methinks! Excellent Miles.
Enjoyed this. You should turn it into a short story!
When I get done with my other stuff, likely.
Hm, now I’m wondering what he saw that scared him off — and whether she realizes her effect on people!
A glare can make people run!
He is presumably a ghost, because he asks whether this ruin is taken. So what does that make her, I wonder? Or have I got it back-to-front? You’ve created an enigma, Miles!
Yeah, I agree with Penny. Can’t seem to figure this one out! 🙂
I liked “She wanted serenity, without the loneliness”. Rings so true.
Neither are ghosts. She’s just a scary woman when she glares at people.
So many unanswered questions! This feels like it could be expanded on, still as flash, but maybe another installment? 🙂
Depends. We’ll see!
One’s imagination truly runs wild.
Yep yep! ^_^
A brilliant cliffhanger at the end. My guess is that she was involved in scientific experiments in that building and ended up badly disfigured in the face by an experiment that went wrong. Of course, whether she’s an apparition or still alive is open to question….I’m probably barking up the wrong tree, but that’s the beauty of clever cliffhangers. So many possibilities. Well done.
I like this idea. I originally just had her as a lonely girl who just had evil glares for all guys, though unintentional, and she keeps ending up alone. But who knows.
Thanks, Miles 🙂 It’s fascinating to see the different ways that people interpret a piece of writing, just as it’s fascinating to see how they respond to the photo prompt each week. I thought of her as someone who wanted to break free of a particular man’s domination, but then finds that there is no such thing as total escape, as she can’t erase the memory of him.
Sounds like there’s something in her expression which scares folk off, poor girl. Serenity without loneliness would be a great place to be.
Some people naturally have that angry face.
I know a few people who seem like her. Wants friends and even finding love and a partner but have personality traits which get in the way. Even when these people have grated me, I try to see the person at the bottom of it…their heart ache, which isn’t always easy.
It is tough. But when you dig deep, you many times find the sapphire that is so precious.
That must be some glare. At first I also thought she was a ghost.
Medusa wants to know her secret. XD