(Author’s note: Things are getting busier as my time to move happens, but I have time to write, so write I will. Taking a cue from David Stewart, my good buddy over at the Green Walled Tower, here’s today’s fictioneers!)
Angel Flight (Like An Angel)
by Miles H. Rost
Opal Creek Pool was breathtaking.
A natural deep pool carved from bedrock at the bottom of a 15-foot waterfall. It was deep enough to dive and not hit bottom.
But for the group of teens from South Salem High School, they weren’t paying attention to the surroundings. They were focused on Angela Beach, the supposed school recluse, standing on the edge of the waterfall in a stunning bikini.
She dove in, her hands pointing just like a professional, and she quickly disappeared into the water. All the teens, especially the men, would swear she was like an angel taking flight.
Great imagery, especially ‘her hands pointing just like a professional’. That’s the sort of little detail that makes such a difference to a story.
It’s the small things, really.
It sounds like the bikini won over the waterfall.
Bicameral minds could think of both in similar succession, but alas… most of them didn’t have bicameral minds. It is true… sometimes bikinis win over waterfalls.
I like this take. Very different.
I like trying to go different with things. Keeps people on their toes.
From the recluse to being the centre of attention! Hallelujah!
Supposed recluse. She really wasn’t one, she just didn’t hand out with the crowds like others did… and just gave the impression that she would always be at home.
Such an attention grabber. 🙂 Well told.
The music adds the accent to the words on the page, lemme tell ya.
She showed them. Lovely descriptions.
I think it’s less that than the guys never really gave her a chance because she wasn’t around them at all.
So well described. I felt I was there. I love the recluse character who was so brave!
It was more likely that this was the place she was going than “staying at home”. Some are just more at home in nature.
Yes, it would be the men. What a wonderful way to enjoy the waterfalls diving like an angel.
What a creative take on the prompt. I can just imagine the scene, the boys’s eyes drawn to Angela, and Angela herself – a recluse who turns out to be something else altogether. Very good.
Hidden talents. 😀