(No Author’s Note! Enjoy things!)
© J. Hardy Carroll
You Don’t Mess Around With Gym
by Miles H. Rost
“Hey, James! Roster’s up!”
James Barclay slapped his gloves on the canvas and sauntered over. His bruised eye looked it over.
“Bugs Jacobs again?! I put him flat 2 weeks ago.”
“He’s persistent,” Marti replied.
“He’s a flippin’ pest.”
Marti grinned, her smile as bright as her hair was. She strutted to the canvas and gave it a slap.
“Wanna practice what you did to him last time?”
James chuckled, as he wrapped his arms around her.
“When I married you, I didn’t think you’d be so bloodthirsty.”
“Well, folks know not to mess around with James.”
“Except you.”
Marti winked.
I hope Marti still loves him when he’s fifty and punch-drunk.
You tell the story well, Miles.
Thank you! I feel like this story went well!
Very believable. Great dialogue, which is often the best way to tell a story 🙂
I did my best with what we had.
What a fun dialogue, Miles. I really enjoyed this!
You’re welcome! And I love writing dialogue.
You don’t pull on Superman’s cape either. I guess a fighter needs a bloodthirsty wife. James chose well.
Without blood in the veins, it runs cold.
I chuckled when I read your title. Excellent dialogue.
I dunno why, it just worked.
She must be a knockout beauty 😉 Nice one.
Har har har! ^_-
She really does love him, doesn’t she? WEll done.
Yep, apparently she does. ^_^
I read so many of these that just ‘tell’ you the story, but your has some nice dialogue. Keep on showing! 🙂
I am guilty of doing that at times.
As others have said, lovely dialogue – very realistic in tone. They have a good relationship going here and you show it well.
I am happy to see that borne out! 🙂
Great story. My only problem is with the sentence: Marti grinned, her smile as bright as her hair was. You don’t need the ‘was’ on the end. It just makes the sentence awkward. Loved the dynamic between the two.