(Author’s Note: I have this strange feeling that I’m about to get blindsided with something at work, and things are in a lot of flux right now. I’ll be continuing at this level until, likely, February. To which I’ll be packing up and on the way back to the States. So I’ll try to keep up. Just beware. Here’s today’s fictioneers!)
© Sandra Crook
Rush Hour
by Miles H. Rost
Preston’s first date in 12 years shouldn’t have ended up like this: Stuck on the interstate in a traffic jam.
He also didn’t expect his date to be flushed and shaking.
“Melanie, what’s going on now?”
“I…can’t hold on much longer.”
Preston’s eyes nervously looked over.
“You gotta hold on! Grrrrrr…”
He looked to his right. Clearance.
He gunned the engine and sped past a light pole. Fingers and horns went everywhere.
Minutes later, he finally pulled up to a building. He quickly got out and opened the door for Melanie.
She bounced out, tabby cat latched to her arm.
Haha! That was unexpected.
Agree with Varad. The build-up had me expecting something very different 🙂
I don’t even know what I was expecting. Good build-up.
I thought “Werewolf transformation” or she really, really had to use the bathroom.
Ha ha – I wasn’t expecting that ending – I thought she needed a loo! Thanks for surprising me. 🙂
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Congrats on maintaining the suspense and then throwing a curve at the end.😄
You led us down the garden path with that story, Miles! Great twist at the end.
Rush hour is hard enough, but with a cat clawing you? That was quite a curve ball you threw at the end, did not see that coming.
Having been at the receiving end of a similar experience recently, I can imagine what she was going through. Loved the story 🙂
Great start brilliant ending! Excellent.
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Great twist. You did throw a curve ball at the end much like the title of my debut novel, ” WHEN LIFE THROWS THOSE CURVE BALLS”.
Lovely tense read.
I love a surprise ending… I hope it’s the beginning for something even better.
Ha, ha, lovely twist.